Do you think I Am hot or not (girl)?

I think you should change it up a little, I'm not sure if it's good to change the pattern of the poem in the second paragraph it's a little confusing. so stick with either the 1,2,1,2,1,2, or stick with 1,1,2,2,1,1 i hope you understand what I mean. If you were told it was okay to change up then don't worry about it. the last paragraph you can't really rhyme coops with troops. if that was your intention. If you can read it in a way where it does rhyme then that's good, but if this is something your handing in, try and simplify it a little bit just to make it easier for someone who has never heard it before to read. aside from that, the story is very random....but i like it ;) CHEERS